Poetry: Opposites Attract

Hola, Reader! Today is a really short post.

I was lucky enough to have a poetry war with one of my friends, and I spontaneously created this poem. (Isn’t it great when that happens?) I edited it slightly once we were done with the poetry battle to help it rhyme, and here it is:

“Opposites attract;

Perhaps this the reason be

Why my self in one piece stays;

For if the same all my days

I ‘twould fly apart and flee.”

The friend & I were commenting on how different we ourselves are compared to when we are with friends and when we are by ourselves. So this poem spontaneously came into my brain: since there are opposites of nature within us and opposites attract, we stay in one piece.

However, it’s rather strange; because the people who have the same personality and character no matter what situation they’re in are typically more consistent, reliable, and stable. So the “opposites attract” doesn’t really apply to within people, it seems to only apply to people-to-people and electrical charge-to-charge relationships.

Anyway, I hope you enjoyed the poem! Have a great day! 🙂

-Anne

Author: Anne B. Caitlin

I am a Christian, a writer, a blogger, and a rebelutionary (check out therebelution.com). I am N (check out i-am-n.com)! I will have a book finished in the next year or two (hurrah!). Anyway, that's enough for now :)

9 thoughts on “Poetry: Opposites Attract”

  1. Poem version 3.0: “Opposites attract, Perhaps this the reason be Why my self in one piece stays; For if the same I stayed always, I would fly apart and flee.”

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    1. Thanks!
      Doesn’t impious mean “not pious” and “disrespectful”?
      I was struggling to find a one-syllable replacement for “the same” so that I could write “For if ____ my self remains”, then it would flow better.
      I like the poetry that rhymes in syllables and in (oh, there was a word for this) the words at the end of each line. So I kept it to the 9-syllable lines + first and last then middle two rhyming together.
      Here is the original version: “Opposites attract, Perhaps this the reason be My self stays in one piece For if I were the same I would fly apart and flee”.
      Thanks for the feedback!

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      1. I’m sorry Anne, you are correct, impious has the complete opposite meaning in Portuguese (my language), where it means pure and untainted; I deeply apologise for this lapse.

        I must say, I do prefer, the original version much, much better. I believe you might be speaking of codas, or ending-sound structures, in which the momentum of the oration rests upon the last of each note, therefor, in the silence.
        This can truly be done without sounding overly parataxic, but you require verse autonomy to do so. If you use this method and simultaneously take advantage of enjambment, you are relying on a lapses of silence that inherently break the cadence of the construction. Your choice to keep it as an enclosed rhyme is understandable, but the execution leaves it hampered.

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      2. No apologies needed! We all lapse at some time or another. I would be a hypocrite if I took offense, having chosen the wrong words and grammar structures occasionally myself! And having the same word mean a completely different thing in a different language must make it so much harder.

        Thank you for the feedback! I am already learning more about poetry from what you have said.
        Isn’t it interesting, how we humans can use systems that we know not about? For example, I did not know I was using enjambment (nor did I know what it meant) until you said so just now. And upon looking the word up, I have learned about it and seen how my poem also uses it.
        Am I correct that enjambment is poetry where the phrases are split in half and where the punctuation does not lie at the end of the line?

        Thank you! And thank you for taking the time to read, comment, and reply to this post and my comments!

        -Anne

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      3. Thank you for your kindness and receptiveness, even though I might sound stiff or involuted, it is but a product of a very mechanical learning of your language.

        Enjambment serves a plethora of different purposes, from occlusion to preclusion, and even division of conflicting thoughts!, but it is mainly used as a navigator through syllabic restriction. From what I’ve gathered, you worry about consistent syllabic strikes, and I don’t intend on demoting you from such worries — even poets like Shakespeare and his iambics, or Bellay as his Alexandrines, often broke their meters in order to achieve more idealised structures; but many times, they didn’t do so, because they enjambed. When you do so, you are creating a collective thought within two or more verses, which means it is best to consider it as a whole and break it according to the sounds it produces. Poetics often rely on foresight, as literature often does, rather than pure fluidity.

        I am, by no means, the best explainer of these intricacies, as I have no higher education on the subject; or any subject, I’m a son of farmers in rural Portugal; all my understanding of devices comes from the books I was able to snag. But may you ever see fit to require more advice, or simply conversational poetics, you are always allowed entry into my impish lands of Caliath.

        I truly hope I helped, thank you Anne.

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      4. It’s no problem! And you don’t sound stiff. I just marvel at how well you use English—especially if it’s not your first language! I hope I can learn other languages as well.
        And yes, you did! Thank you.
        Oh, and if you’re looking for books on poetry, I highly recommend Roar On The Other Side by Suzanne Rhodes. I love the book and it’s super helpful!!

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